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The line graph shows information about population,bith and death rate from 1700 to 2000

The line graph shows information about population, bith and death rate from 1700 to 2000 73RlA
The given line graph illustrates the information about the rate of population, death and birth during 1700 to 2000 in England and Wales. Overview, it can be clearly seen from line graph that birth and death rate showed almost similar alternations from starting to ending years. It is manifested that in given initial year the population rate was almost three millions, whereas after fifty years it increased dramatically and reached at 10 millions but in next five decades it declined and stood at same as in last in 1700. After 1800, population rate inclined slightly till 2000. However, in 1700 the death rate was lass than birth rate that was 30 millions, while it rised and came at 40millions, where in 1950 death and birth rate fall down down at 20millions and 22millions respectively. After that death rate was stabled whilst birth rate increased and reached at above to 30 millions
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of population, death and
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during 1700 to 2000 in England and Wales. Overview, it can be
clearly
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seen
from line graph that
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birth
and death
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rate
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showed
almost similar alternations from starting to ending years. It
is manifested
that in
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initial year the population
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rate
was almost three
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, whereas after fifty years it increased
dramatically
and reached at 10
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millions
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in
next
five decades it declined and stood at same as in last in 1700. After 1800, population
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inclined
slightly
till 2000.
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, in 1700 the death
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rate
was lass than
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birth
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that was 30
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millions
, while it
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rised
and came at
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40millions
, where in 1950 death and
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birth
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rate
fall
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down down
at
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20millions
and
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22millions
respectively
. After that death
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rate
was stabled
whilst
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birth
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rate
increased and reached at above to 30
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millions

IELTS academic The line graph shows information about population, bith and death rate from 1700 to 2000

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