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The line graph shows burglaries per thousands in four countries between 2000 and 2009.

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The graph illustrates comparative statistics on the number of burglaries in four countries (Great Britain, Greece, Spain and Norway) over a 10-year period (2000-2009). The units of thefts were measured in thousands. Overall, the highest recurrence of burglary was in Great Britain, which was fairly high from 2000-2009 in comparison to the other countries, while the lowest incidence when the study began in 2000 was in Spain. It can be seen that in 2009 Spain reported slightly lower figures than the other four countries. The graph shows that Great Britain’s burglaries were consistently high, never below the 20, 000 mark, though the trend fluctuates over the 10-year period. According to the data, the country experienced the highest number of thefts during 2002 (20, 000) and 2006 (20, 000). However, it experienced its lowest amount stolen in 2009 at approximately 15, 000. Similarly, Spain experienced fluctuating trends, but on the opposite side of the spectrum as it reported the least amount of burglaries in 2000 (6, 000) with frequency varying over the years and finally reporting a decline in 2009 (4, 000). However, other notable statistics are Greece’s upward trend in the number of burglaries, which started in 2000 (8, 000) and finally peaked at 14, 000 during 2009. Norway is also noteworthy for having considerably low thefts over the course of 10 years compared to the other countries, dropping sharply in 2003, but increasing slightly from there, finally peaking at 6, 000 slightly higher than Spain.
The graph illustrates comparative statistics on the number of
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in four
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countries
(Great Britain, Greece, Spain and Norway)
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over
a
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10-year
period (2000-2009). The units of thefts
were measured
in thousands.

Overall
, the highest recurrence of
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burglary
was in Great Britain, which was
fairly
high from 2000-2009
in comparison
to the
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other
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countries
, while the lowest incidence when the study began in 2000 was in Spain. It can be
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seen
that in 2009 Spain reported
slightly
lower figures than the
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four countries.

The graph
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that Great Britain’s
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were
consistently
high, never below the 20, 000 mark, though the trend fluctuates
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over
the
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10-year
period. According to the data, the
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country
experienced the highest number of thefts during 2002 (20, 000) and 2006 (20, 000).
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, it experienced its lowest amount stolen in 2009 at approximately 15, 000.

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, Spain experienced fluctuating trends,
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on the opposite side of the spectrum as it reported the least amount of
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burglaries
in 2000 (6, 000) with frequency varying
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the years and
finally
reporting a decline in 2009 (4, 000).
However
,
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notable statistics are Greece’s upward trend in the number of
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, which
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started
in 2000 (8, 000) and
finally
peaked at 14, 000 during 2009. Norway is
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noteworthy for having
considerably
low thefts
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the course of 10 years compared to the
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countries
, dropping
sharply
in 2003,
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but
increasing
slightly
from there,
finally
peaking at 6, 000
slightly
higher than Spain.
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