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The chart below shows a comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in 1995 and 2005.

The chart below shows a comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in 1995 and 2005. RL0M
The pie charts compare the proportion of energy production from the five different sources in France for the years 1995 and 2005. It is clear that the percentage of energy produced from coal, gas, nuclear and other sources increased, the reverse was true for petrol over the period shown. Additionally, coal and gas were the two most means of energy production in this country during the research period. In 1995, coal was the primary energy source in France, with the figure registering nearly 30%. In contrast, gas and petrol used to create 26. 63% and 29. 27% of the total energy, respectively. In contrast, only 4. 9% of the total energy generated from other sources compared with 6. 4% by nuclear power. In 2005, the proportion of energy generated from gas and coal rose dramatically to 30. 31% and 30. 39%, respectively. Meanwhile, there was a considerable increase in the figures for nuclear and other sources to 10. 10% and 9. 10%, respectively. By contrast, much less amount of energy generated from petrol as illustrated by a dramatic fall of nearly 10% to 19. 55%
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production from the five
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in France for the years 1995 and 2005.

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that the percentage of
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produced from coal,
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, nuclear and other
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increased, the reverse was true for petrol over the period shown.
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gas
were the two most means of
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production in this country during the research period.

In 1995, coal was the primary
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in France, with the figure registering
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to create 26. 63% and 29. 27% of the total
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,
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4. 9% of the total
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generated from other
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compared with 6. 4% by nuclear power.

In 2005, the proportion of
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generated from
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and coal rose
dramatically
to 30. 31% and 30. 39%,
respectively
. Meanwhile, there was a considerable increase in the figures for nuclear and other
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to 10. 10% and 9. 10%,
respectively
. By contrast, much less amount of
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generated from petrol as illustrated by a dramatic fall of
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10% to 19. 55%

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