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The line graph show the consumption of fast food in gram in the USA from 1970 to 1990.

The line graph show the consumption of fast food in gram in the USA from 1970 to 1990. 1A3ON
The given line graph compares and contrasts data on the changes in the consumption of fast food, namely hamburger, fish and chips and pizza in gram in America over a period of 20 years from 1970 to 1990. An overview of the line graph reveals that the figure for hamburger and fish and chips witnessed upwards trends over the period surveyed while the reverse was true for pizza. The amount of hamburger was about 30 gram in the initial year, which was lower than that of fish and chips, at 80 gramms. Then, the figuge for hamburger saw slight increase to 100 grams in 1985. Subsequently, this figure soared to approximately 300 grams. Similarly, the comsumption of fish and chips rose marginally to 150 grams between 1970 and 1980. Finally, there was dramatically climb to 500 grams in the end of the period. On the other hand, the consumption of pizza an underwent slow decline from 300 grams to 200 grams over the 15 years period from 1970. Afterwards, the 1990 experienced an insignificant increase in this figure.
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in the consumption of
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in America over a period of 20 years from 1970 to 1990.

An overview of the line graph reveals that the figure for hamburger and fish and chips witnessed upwards trends over the period surveyed while the reverse was true for pizza.

The amount of hamburger was about 30
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in the initial year, which was lower than that of fish and chips, at 80
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. Then, the
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for hamburger
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slight increase to 100
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in 1985.
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, this figure soared to approximately 300
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.
Similarly
, the
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comsumption
of fish and chips rose
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to 150
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grams
between 1970 and 1980.
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, there was
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climb to 500
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in the
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end
of the period.

On the other hand
, the consumption of pizza an underwent slow decline from 300
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to 200
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grams
over the 15 years period from 1970. Afterwards, the 1990 experienced an insignificant increase in this figure.

IELTS academic The line graph show the consumption of fast food in gram in the USA from 1970 to 1990.

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