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The line graph illustrates three different kinds of fast food consumed by youngsters in Mauritius from the 1985 to 2015.

The line graph illustrates three different kinds of fast food consumed by youngsters in Mauritius from the 1985 to 2015. NmAed

Overall, the consumption of hamburgers and fried chicken has increased over the period. while the consumption of pizza has drastically dropped. At the start of the period, pizza was the most consumed fast food by teenagers. Which then replaced by fried chicken from 2000 to 2015, and the following hamburger and fried chicken have the most widely eaten fast food in the final years. with regards to pizza, it began around 60 units before slowly collapsing to 10 units. Likewise, approximately 5 units of fried chicken were eaten in 1985 and then reached the peak at 60 units and then remained constant for five years and later increased by around 2 to 3 units in 2015. On the other hand, the consumption of hamburgers only started in 1985 at about 10 units. This figure then reached a high of over 70 grams 30 years later.

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