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the graph below gives the information about the percentage of people,who watched television in their free time on uk betwwen 1990 and 2010.

the graph below gives the information about the percentage of people, who watched television in their free time on uk betwwen 1990 and 2010. rLWBp
The given table graph compares the data about the proportion of three different catagerious of individuals namly: men, women and infants, who watched television for spending their lesiure time in the United Kingdom between 1990 and 2010. Overall, it can be noticed that the artio of all television viewers in uk followed up-ward trend during given time period except to the percentage of men viewers declined in the last year. In 1990, 15% women watched t. v in Uk, which increased continuously from 15% in 1990 to 35% in 2010, it accounted for a noticeable change in the percentage of female viewers than males. Although, the figure of infants showed a significant growth during changing time period for watching television, but it experienced with least ratio of children with figures only 5% in the first year(1990). While, the proportion of pupils was rose considerably by more than one-thirds(35%) untill last year. Moreover, one fifth men liked to watch television in their free time in 1990 and this figure grow with more than one quartar after a decade. However, the percentage of male viewers fall in the end year(2010), which witnessed for almost 19% in the UK and it was least proportion of males for watching television in their spare time than others in the same year.
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catagerious
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men
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watched
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television
for spending their
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lesiure
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in the United Kingdom between 1990 and 2010.

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artio
of all
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television
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viewers
in
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uk
followed up-ward trend during
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given
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period except to the percentage of
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men
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viewers
declined in the last year.

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watched
t. v in
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Uk
, which increased
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from 15% in 1990 to 35% in 2010, it accounted for a noticeable
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in the percentage of female
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viewers
than males. Although, the figure of infants
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showed
a significant growth during changing
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time
period for watching
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television
,
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it experienced with
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ratio of children with figures
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liked to
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in their free
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in 1990 and
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fall in the
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year(2010), which witnessed for almost 19% in the UK and it was
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proportion of males for watching
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in their spare
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than others in the same year.

IELTS academic the graph below gives the information about the percentage of people, who watched television in their free time on uk betwwen 1990 and 2010.

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