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The line graph depicts the percentage of people living in Australia, being Asian, British and from other countries during the 35 years since 1976.

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The graph line delineates the proportion of people living in Australia, who are Asian, English, and from other countries over the course of 35 years starting from 1976. Overall, the full amount of the rate witnessed a slight deceased in the first 6 years and started to go up again. In addition, the value of other nations and Asia experienced a steep increase, while the UK citizens had the lowest rate of immigrants. To begin with, the value of Asian people ameliorated slightly and reached a peak of 16% from 1976 to 2011. We can see the same growth in other regions as well. In the first research year, the percentage of immigrants witnessed an oscillation and registered the highest level about 15% in 2006 then began to slowly decline after that at 5% Following an opposite trend, the record of UK residents experienced a moderate fall from 15% in 1967 to 5% when coming to the end of the research course.
The graph line delineates the proportion of
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people
living in Australia, who are Asian, English, and from other countries over the course of 35 years starting from 1976.

Overall
, the full amount of the rate witnessed a slight deceased in the
first
6 years and
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started
to go up again.
In addition
, the value of other nations and Asia experienced a steep increase, while the UK citizens had the lowest rate of immigrants.

To
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begin
with, the value of Asian
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people
ameliorated
slightly
and reached a peak of 16% from 1976 to 2011. We can
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see
the same growth in other regions
as well
. In the
first
research year, the percentage of immigrants witnessed an oscillation and registered the highest level about 15% in 2006 then began to
slowly
decline after that at 5%

Following an opposite trend, the record of UK residents experienced a moderate fall from 15% in 1967 to 5% when coming to the
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end
of the research course.
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