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The line graph below compares the proportion of first-year teachers who taught jobs by year of graduation from 2001 to 2007.

The line graph below compares the proportion of first-year teachers who taught jobs by year of graduation from 2001 to 2007. MoOKk
The line graph below compares the proportion of first-year teachers who taught jobs by year of graduation from 2001 to 2007. In the first 2 years, there was a similarity between the two types of teachers. More specically, both of them faced a considerable decrease, at about 18 percent. However, the number of teachers teaching English was still higher than the number of another one. In the next year, the figure rose dramatically for French-language teachers from 55 percent to 68 percent, but fell continually for teachers who taught English. Between 2003 and 2005, there was a slightly fluctuation in the percentage of both categories. Since 2006, an upward trend was seen in the figure for teachers teaching French while there was a sharply decrease in the proportion of English-language teachers. Overall, it can be seen that there were more and more teachers who decided to teach English instead of French.
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who taught jobs by year of graduation from 2001 to 2007.

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first
2 years, there was a similarity between the two types of
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teachers
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specically
, both of them faced a considerable decrease, at about 18 percent.
However
, the number of
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teaching English was
still
higher than the number of another one.

In the
next
year, the figure rose
dramatically
for French-language
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teachers
from 55 percent to 68 percent,
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but
fell
continually
for
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teachers
who taught English. Between 2003 and 2005, there was a
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slightly fluctuation
in the percentage of both categories. Since 2006, an upward trend was
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seen
in the figure for
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teachers
teaching French while there was a
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sharply decrease
in the proportion of English-language teachers.

Overall
, it can be
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seen
that there were more and more
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teachers
who decided to teach English
instead
of French.
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