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the line chartshows the retailing price of black and white tv, the ratailing price of colour tv....

the line chartshows the retailing price of black and white tv, the ratailing price of colour tv. . . . jdOra

The line graph highlights the data about altering prices of the both television sets, black and white and colour, as well as retailers’ salaries in Japanese shops, over a two decade period between 1953 and 1973. The amount of pays and earnings were provided in YEN thousand. Overall, it can been clearly remarked that the prices of the both sorts of television sets decreased at least half while the average monthly salaries of retailers obtained a ten-fold increase. Looking at details, in 1953 a cost of black and white started at just below 200, which meant the highest price over the period. During the next years the line had been going down slowly to about 140 by 1958 when colour televisions appeared in shops with cost around 170. So, there was a 30 margin between them in 1958. The following 5 years showed a slight identical fall; in 1963, the tendency of fall rose till 1973 with prices about 40 for black and white and 80 for colour. As for the average monthly income of retailers, which were just about 20 in 1953. However, there was a jump during the period to around 200.

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