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The information about the rates of employment in Australia, Switzerland, Iceland, New Zealand, Great Britain, and the USA

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The information about the rates of employment in Australia, Switzerland, Iceland, New Zealand, Great Britain, and the USA is depicted by the rendered vertical bar graph. The data has been calibrated in percentage. Overall, it can be clearly observed from the graph is that the men were having the higher employment rates in all the six nations throughout the period whereas women were having the lowest rate of employment. Furthermore, the rates for both male and female had increased at the end of the period as compared to the start of the period. In Australia, approximately 53% males had jobs in 1995 whereas around 28% females were working. The employment ratio for both men and women increased by 16% and 11% respectively in the year 2005. Moving towards, Switzerland around 63% male and 52% female were working in 1995, which then increased around 79% for male and 69% for female. With regards to Iceland, it was the only nation who had the highest number of employment rates of men at the end of the period among all the six nations. In 1995, the employment ratio of men was around 71% and for female it comprised to 41%. For both the genders the rates were increased by 10% in 2005. In the UK, there were 60% male and 51% females who used to work and by 2005 there were 71% male and 61% female. New Zealand was having the lowest employment rate of women as compared to all the six nations at the start of period, and it was around 60% for male and 23% for female in 1995 which then increased in further years, and by the end it reached almost at 71% for male and 41% for female in the year 2005. America had 59% male and 61% female in 1995 and by 2005 it was around 71% male and 61% female.
The information about the
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rates
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employment
in Australia, Switzerland, Iceland, New Zealand, Great Britain, and the USA
is depicted
by the rendered vertical bar graph. The data has
been calibrated
in percentage.

Overall
, it can be
clearly
observed from the graph is that the
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men
were having the higher
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employment
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rates
in all the six
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nations
throughout the
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period
whereas women were having the lowest
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rate
of
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employment
.
Furthermore
, the
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rates
for both male and
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female
had
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increased
at the
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end
of the
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period
as compared to the
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of the period.

In Australia, approximately 53%
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males
had jobs in 1995 whereas
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around
28%
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females
were working. The
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employment
ratio for both
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men
and women
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increased
by 16% and 11%
respectively
in the year 2005. Moving towards, Switzerland
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around
63% male and 52%
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female
were working in 1995, which then
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increased
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around
79% for male and 69% for female.

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nation
who had the highest number of
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among all the six
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. In 1995, the
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ratio of
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was
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71% and for
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it comprised to 41%. For both the genders the
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were
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by 10% in 2005. In the UK, there were 60% male and 51%
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female
. New Zealand was having the lowest
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in 1995 which then
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in the year 2005. America had 59% male and 61%
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IELTS academic The information about the rates of employment in Australia, Switzerland, Iceland, New Zealand, Great Britain, and the USA

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