Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Percentage of female entering higher education was for the years 1980 and 2015 in five different countries

Percentage of female entering higher education was for the years 1980 and 2015 in five different countries Edm0R
The bar chart illustrates how much the percentage of female entering higher education was for the years 1980 and 2015 in five different countries. Generally, of all the countries the percentage of female entering higher education went up, except for Australia who remained steadily around 60%. Among the four countries that enjoyed a considerable increase in the percentage of female entering higher education, UK and USA had the most dramatic rise, surging for approximately 20%. South Korea also experience a significant improvement of about 15%. Significantly, in 1980 Australia had the highest female higher education whereas South Korea had the lowest. In 2015, the percentage of female entering high education in USA rose from just under 40% to almost 60%. The highest percentage among the five countries was a tie between USA and Australia whereas South Korea remained the lowest.
The bar chart illustrates how much the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percentage
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
female
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
entering
higher
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
was for the years 1980 and 2015 in five
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
countries.

Generally
, of all the countries the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percentage
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
female
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
entering
higher
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
went up,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
except for
Australia who remained
steadily
around 60%. Among the four countries that enjoyed a considerable increase in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percentage
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
female
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
entering
higher
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
, UK and USA had the most dramatic rise, surging for approximately 20%. South Korea
also
experience a significant improvement of about 15%.

Significantly
, in 1980 Australia had the highest
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
female
higher
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
whereas South Korea had the lowest. In 2015, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percentage
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
female
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
entering
high
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
in USA rose from
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
under 40% to almost 60%. The highest
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
percentage
among the five countries was a tie
A determiner is probably missing here: "between the USA".
between USA
and Australia whereas South Korea remained the lowest.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS academic Percentage of female entering higher education was for the years 1980 and 2015 in five different countries

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
140 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts
  • 5band
    gnnfnfvfdvvfdsfdsfdsvfsvs
    The line chart provides information on the number of students from Indonesia, Hong Kong, Malaysia and Singapore who studied in Australia between 1982 and 2000 Overall, the most outstanding feature of the line chart is that four Asian countries witnessed a substantial increase in students total in A...
  • 6.5band
    Bar graph compares percentage of students in higher education
    The bar graph compares the percentage of young peoples enrolled in higher education in four different countries over a decade following the Year 2000. Overall, an increment in percentage of students involvement in graduation was observed in country A, C and D. whereas, fluctuations were Apparent in...
  • 6.5band
    6. Look at the table below about milk production in Australia and answer the questions.
    The statistic was given in the table shows the changes in the monthly Australian production of milk in two periods 2001/2002 and 2010/2011. Overall, while the production of milk monthly in 2001/2002 and in 2010/2011 showed an increasing trend in July, August, September, and October. That of Austral...
  • 6band
    The graphs illustrate the information of social networking, microblogging and radio find out the daily news by people in the age range of 10-65+
    The graphs illustrate the information of social networking, microblogging and radio find out the daily news by people in the age range of 10-65+. It is clear that most of age get daily news from radio except the 10-17 age group. People who fell into the 10-29 use social networking more than the rem...
  • 6band
    The charts show the amount of oil production by eight countries in 2014 and 2080
    The given diagrams illustrate the percentage of oil manufacture by different nations, over a 66 year period of time between 2014 and 2080. It is anticipated in 2080 Saudi Arabia will constitute the greatest numeral follows by the UAE and the US whereas in 2014 three countries such as Russia, Saudi A...
  • 6band
    Amount spend on Consumer good.
    The bar chart compares consumer spending on six different items in Germany, Italy, France and Britain. It is clear that British people spent significantly more money than people in the other three countries on all six goods. Of the six items, consumers spent the most money on photographic film. Pe...





Get more results for topic:
  • Percentage of female entering higher education was for the years 1980 and 2015 in five different countries