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The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. lyJK

The pictorial representations illustrates the number of international aspirants and domestic students registered in australian universities over a decade. There are two graphs which explains the both students which are commencing there graduation and total students from year 2001 to 2010. The first graph trend confirms that over the decade from 2001 to 2010 overseas students chart significantly rising without any fluctuation both in commencing and of total as in 2001 with 20000 overseas student and in 2010 to reach a peak with 80000 students, contrary in 2009 to 2010 there was slight increase from 40000 to around 41000. On the other hand second chart indicates the enrolment of local students which sharply try to rise till 2006 and got a period of stability from 2006 to 2010, starting from 400000 in 2001 and remain constant with around 600000. Whereas the students who are commencing rise in 2001 but fluctuates and fall in 2003 continue to rise dramatically and then again decline in 2010.

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, contrary in 2009 to 2010 there was slight increase from 40000 to around 41000.

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