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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. QLl79
The line graphs provide information about addmissions of foreign students as well local students in Australian universities over ten year period of time. Overall, overseas students experienced significant rise and local students graph showed increased rate at the beginning but at the end steady rates over the period of time. At the initial state, commensing started with approximately 10, 0000 counts in the year 2001 at overseas students graph and steadily it jumped to 40, 0000 in the year 2009 and ended with same count in the year 2010. While on the other hand local students enrollement showed fluctutions in commensing graph period. It was started with approximately 19, 00, 000 count and ended with 200000 over the period 2001 to 2010. So local students rate of enrolments were higher than foreign students. Total range started with 20000 in the year 2001 for overseas students. Steady but significant jumped to 80000 in the yaer 2010. Local students total depicted 20 times more than overseas student. It was begin with 4, 00, 000 and ended with 600000 over the periods 2001 to 2010 respectively.
The line
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graphs
provide information about
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addmissions
of foreign
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students
as well
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local
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students
in Australian universities
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over
ten
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year
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period
of time.

Overall
,
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overseas
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students
experienced significant rise and
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local
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students
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graph
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showed
increased rate at the beginning
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but
at the
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end
steady rates
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over
the
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period
of time.

At the initial state,
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commensing
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started
with approximately 10, 0000 counts in the
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year
2001 at
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overseas
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students
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graph
and
steadily
it jumped to 40, 0000 in the
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year
2009 and ended with same count in the
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year
2010.
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While
on the other hand
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local
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students
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enrollement
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showed
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fluctutions
in
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commensing
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graph
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period
. It was
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started
with approximately 19, 00, 000 count and ended with 200000
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over
the
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period
2001 to 2010.
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So
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local
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students
rate of
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enrolments
were higher than foreign students.

Total range
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started
with 20000 in the
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year
2001 for
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overseas
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students
. Steady
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but
significant jumped to 80000 in the
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yaer
2010.
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Local
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students
total depicted 20 times more than
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overseas
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student
. It was
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begin
with 4, 00, 000 and ended with 600000
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over
the
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periods
2001 to 2010
respectively
.
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IELTS academic The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

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6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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