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The graph below compares the changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below compares the changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 and 2000. 8kr5
The graph demonstrated some striking similarities between the Chinese and the US birth rates from 1920 to 2000. Both countries experienced considerable fluctuations in the similar period with some lows during the 1940s and some highs during the 1930s. The birth rates in China rose from 10% in 1920 to 15% in 1935. Later, the figure plunged to a low of 5% in the 1940s and was followed by an exponential growth to the peak of 20% in 1950. Next, the fertility rate dropped sharply to 8% in the following five years. Finally, the figure declined gradually to 3% during the latter half of the century. Meanwhile, the US had similar birth rate of 12% to that of China in 1920. The figure fluctuated in between 12% and 14% during 1920s and 1930s until it hit a low of 4% in 1945. Five years later, the birth rate reached a peak at 15% in 1950 but it made a steady fall to the final figure of around 7% in 2000.
The graph demonstrated
some
striking similarities between the Chinese and the US
birth
rates
from 1920 to 2000. Both countries experienced considerable fluctuations in the similar period with
some
lows during the 1940s and
some
highs during the 1930s.

The
birth
rates
in China rose from 10% in 1920 to 15% in 1935. Later, the
figure
plunged to a low of 5% in the 1940s and
was followed
by an exponential growth to the peak of 20% in 1950.
Next
, the fertility
rate
dropped
sharply
to 8% in the following five years.
Finally
, the
figure
declined
gradually
to 3% during the latter half of the century.

Meanwhile, the US had similar
birth
rate
of 12% to that of China in 1920. The
figure
fluctuated in between 12% and 14% during 1920s and 1930s until it hit a low of 4% in 1945. Five years later, the
birth
rate
reached a peak at 15% in 1950
but
it made a steady fall to the final
figure
of around 7% in 2000.
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IELTS academic The graph below compares the changes in the birth rates of China and the USA between 1920 and 2000.

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