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The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing task 1

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Gjeg
The two line graphs enumerate enrolments and total number of local and overseas students in Australian universities from 2001 to 2010. At first glance, it is obvious that total number of local students is far higher than the number of overseas students in Australia. Regarding enrolments to universities, there is a constant rise in number of overseas students, and number of local students remains almost the same throughout 10 year period. In 2001, around 10, 000 overseas students commenced universities, similarly, around 15, 000 local students commenced the university in the same year. Regading overseas students, a continuous growth in numbers can be seen throughout the ten year period when it reaches its peak of 40, 000 enrolment of overseas students. Number of local students, however, reaches its peak in 2002 with just over 20, 000 enrolment, and for the rest of the period it remains at approximately 20, 000 enrolments. Total number of local students iin 2001 was 40, 000 which is exactly double the total number of overseas students. Total number of overseas students rose significantly over the following years, reaching 80, 000 in 2010, whereas total number of local students rose up to 60, 000 in 2007 after which it remains the same until 2010.
The two line graphs enumerate
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enrolments
and
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total
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number
of
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local
and
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overseas
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students
in Australian
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universities
from 2001 to 2010.

At
first
glance, it is obvious that
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total
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number
of
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local
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students
is far higher than the
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number
of
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overseas
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students
in Australia. Regarding
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enrolments
to
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universities
, there is a constant rise in
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number
of
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overseas
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students
, and
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number
of
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local
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students
remains almost the same throughout 10
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year
period.

In 2001, around 10, 000
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overseas
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students
commenced
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universities
,
similarly
, around 15, 000
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local
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students
commenced the
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university
in the same
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year
.
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Regading
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overseas
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students
, a continuous growth in
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numbers
can be
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seen
throughout the ten
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year
period when it reaches its peak of 40, 000
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enrolment
of
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overseas
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students
.
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of
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local
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students
,
however
, reaches its peak in 2002 with
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just
over 20, 000
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enrolment
, and for the rest of the period it remains at approximately 20, 000
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enrolments
.

Total
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number
of
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local
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students
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iin
2001 was 40, 000 which is exactly double the
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total
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number
of
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overseas
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students
.
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Total
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number
of
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overseas
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students
rose
significantly
over the following years, reaching 80, 000 in 2010, whereas
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total
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number
of
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local
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students
rose up to 60, 000 in 2007 after which it remains the same until 2010.

IELTS academic The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

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208 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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