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The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Aj3qL
The line graphs illustrate the enronlments of overseas and local student in Australian universities over a decade, from 2001 to 2010. Overall, the number of freshman with respect to the total enrolled students is sharply more from ouside than from Australia. The first chart give information about overseas freshmans, that are almost the 50% of the total enrolled from different countries during all the analyzed period, growing from about 10000 in 2001 to 40000 in 2010. The line rises very fast between 2006 and 2009, then becomes quite flat in 2010. The second graph compares the number of new and total enronlements of local students. The lines shows that the number of freshman is almost costant around 200000. While the total enrolled increase exponentially between 2001 and 2008, from 400000 to 60000. Then remains constant for the rest of the decade.
The line graphs illustrate the
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enronlments
of overseas and local student in

Australian universities over a decade, from 2001 to 2010.

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, the number of freshman with respect to the
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enrolled students

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is
sharply
more from
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ouside
than from Australia.

The
first
chart give information about overseas
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freshmans
, that are almost the 50% of the
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total
enrolled from
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different
countries during all the analyzed period, growing from about 10000 in 2001 to 40000 in 2010. The line rises
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very
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fast
between 2006 and 2009, then becomes quite flat in 2010.

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The
second graph compares the number of new and
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total
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enronlements
of local students.
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The
lines
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that the number of freshman is almost
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costant
around 200000. While the
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total
enrolled increase
exponentially
between 2001 and 2008, from 400000 to 60000. Then remains constant for the rest of the decade.
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IELTS academic The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

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