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The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. 0ApxB
This line graph shows number of commuters using car, bus and train to travel around UK since 1970 to 2030. It is clear from the graph the number of people who using car to travel is higher than bus and train. According to what is shown, between 1970 and 1980 there are no change average of commuters ramain same. Moreover, since 1980 the precentage of using care is speedily increased till 2000, then it remain constant until 2010. After that, it rocketed to its peak in 2030 to be almost 9 millions. In other hand, number of people who using bus to travel decresed since 1990 to be around 3. 5 millions. Moreover, it is sharply declind to be less that 3 millions in 2030. Although, number of commuters for the train get increased to reached 3 millions in 2000, then it remain same until 2010. After that it is dramatically increased to be around 5 millions in 2030. To sum up, we could say that number of people who using car or train increased since 1980. However, average of using bus drop down.
This line graph
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shows
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number
of commuters using car, bus and train
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to travel
around UK since 1970 to 2030. It is
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clear
from the graph the
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number
of
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people
who using car to travel is higher than bus and train.

According to what
is shown
, between 1970 and 1980 there are no
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change
average of commuters
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ramain
same.
Moreover
, since 1980 the
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precentage
of using care is
speedily
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increased
till 2000, then it
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remain
constant until 2010. After that, it rocketed to its peak in 2030 to be almost 9 millions.

In other hand,
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number
of
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people
who using bus to travel
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decresed
since 1990 to be around 3. 5
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millions
.
Moreover
, it is
sharply
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declind
to be less that 3
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millions
in 2030. Although,
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number
of commuters for the train
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get
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increased
to reached 3
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millions
in 2000, then it
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remain
same until 2010.
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After
that it is
dramatically
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increased
to be around 5
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millions
in 2030.

To sum up, we could say that
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number
of
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people
who using car or train
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increased
since 1980.
However
, average of using bus
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drop down
.

IELTS academic The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

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184 words
6.0
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