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The graphs above give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graphs above give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. yXakl
As the ownership of computer according to population and education level is illustrated in the picture, in the years 2002 and 2010. Comparison between the ownership can be identified based in the information given in terms of percentage of users. Initially, the first chart depicts that the ownership of computers continuously increase over the years from 2002 to 2010. The increase in percentage is nearly 5 in the consecutive couple of years. At the start of the year 2002 ownership is around 55% and at the year of 2010 is over 75%. While considering the later chart it compares the computer ownership percentage by the level of education. Most importantly it clearly notifying that how the ownership has been raised between the year 2002 and 2010. As it is depicts, Postgraduate qualification category has the more percentage of ownership in both years. Similarly, high school diploma has the least percentage. In short, nearly 75 percent of population and approximately 95 percent of postgraduates has the ownership of computers. The ownership is increased from the lower level of education to the higher one.
As the
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ownership
of computer according to population and education level
is illustrated
in the picture, in the years 2002 and 2010. Comparison between the
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ownership
can
be identified
based in the information
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given
in terms of
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percentage
of users.

Initially
, the
first
chart depicts that the
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ownership
of computers
continuously
increase over the years from 2002 to 2010. The increase in
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percentage
is
nearly
5 in the consecutive couple of years. At the
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of
the
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year
2002
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ownership
is around 55% and at the
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year
of 2010 is over 75%.
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While
considering the later chart it compares the computer
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ownership
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percentage
by the level of education. Most
importantly
it
clearly
notifying that how the
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ownership
has
been raised
between the
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year
2002 and 2010. As it is depicts, Postgraduate qualification category has the more
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percentage
of
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ownership
in both years.
Similarly
, high school diploma has the least percentage.

In short,
nearly
75 percent of population and approximately 95 percent of postgraduates has the
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ownership
of computers. The
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ownership
is increased
from the lower level of education to the higher one.
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IELTS academic The graphs above give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
182 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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