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The graph shows the data of the Deaths and the Patients in India. The table is given in percentage. This is recorded for the year 2020. The cause of this unfortunate situation in the country is due to the pandemic.

The graph shows the data of the Deaths and the Patients in India. The table is given in percentage. This is recorded for the year 2020. The cause of this unfortunate situation in the country is due to the pandemic. NrPoW
Due to the unfortunate upsurge of the pandemic in India many citizens died, when compared to the asymptomatic. The data is from January to October, 2020 and recorded by percentage. The Line graph indicates that in 2020 January the Deaths were 10 percent more than the patients. However till March both the Deaths and Patients increased to 30 percent and 20 percent respectively then remained constant. This drastic occurrence of the Death shocked the nation. Amazingly from April, the Deaths plummeted to 60 percent and then stable, whereas the asymptomatic people continued to escalate to 90 percent, this was an alarming observation. Nevertheless the Government played a pivotal role and from July to October, the graph depicts the significant plunge in the Deaths at 30 percent and Patients at 10 percent. Overall, in January the percentage was high, then fluctuated. However there is a positive expectation of a decrease of the Deaths and Patients. To conclude, India will fight against this epidemic, and eradicate this unfortunate outburst of the plague.
Due to the unfortunate upsurge of the pandemic in India
many
citizens
died
, when compared to the asymptomatic. The data is from January to
October, 2020
and recorded by percentage.

The Line graph indicates that in 2020 January the Deaths were 10
percent
more than the patients.
However
till March both the Deaths and Patients increased to 30
percent
and 20
percent
respectively
then remained constant. This drastic occurrence of the Death shocked the nation.

Amazingly
from April, the Deaths plummeted to 60
percent
and then stable, whereas the asymptomatic
people
continued to escalate to 90
percent
, this was an alarming observation.

Nevertheless
the
Government
played a pivotal role and from July to October, the graph depicts the significant plunge in the Deaths at 30
percent
and Patients at 10 percent.

Overall
, in January the percentage was high, then fluctuated.
However
there is a
positive
expectation of a decrease of the Deaths and Patients.

To conclude
, India will fight against this epidemic, and eradicate this unfortunate outburst of the plague.
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