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The graph shows the results of a survey in which 100 boys and 100 girls were asked whether they like a number of leisure activities

The graph shows the results of a survey in which 100 boys and 100 girls were asked whether they like a number of leisure activities M3w7q
The chart below enumerate a survey results which compare between two sexes about the free-time activities. At the first glance, boys generally prefer computers game, watching televison and museum while girls participated in going out with friends, listening to music, theater, cinema and reading. As the presented diagram, it illustrated that boys prefer playing computer game more than anything else ( approximately 67%), there were higher than girls ( approximately 17%). On the contragy, the reading habit, the girls make up more percentage than boys ( approximately 30%). It also the most popular pursuits activities that the girls does ( approximately 65%). On the other hand, males and females were more equally represented in out-door activities like: going with friends, theatre, museums and cinema. Moreover, it also illustrated in listening to music and watching television. The percentage of all this activities are not much different in two sexes ( approximately 5%-10%). In conclusion, it can be seen from the graph that the boys have a trend on physic activities while girls have a trend on mindful acivities.
The chart below enumerate a survey results which compare between two sexes about the free-time
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participated in going out with friends, listening to music, theater, cinema and reading.

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IELTS academic The graph shows the results of a survey in which 100 boys and 100 girls were asked whether they like a number of leisure activities

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6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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