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The graph shows the percentage of people going to the cinema between 1986 to 2000 by ages.

The graph shows the percentage of people going to the cinema between 1986 to 2000 by ages. PW3Xg
The graph illustrates the proportions of four different age brackets visiting the cinema once each month in Great Britain over a period of 16 years from 1986 to 2000. Overall, it can be clearly seen that the UK experienced an overall growth in cinema attendance. Young adults aged 15 and 24 occupied the largest share during the period given, whereas the percentage of the oldest group was consistently lowest. In 1984, 18% of people aged 15 and 24 visited the cinema once a month, which nearly doubled that of children between 7 and 14/ people aged 7 and 14, at 10%. The figure for adults ages 25 and 35 was much lower, at about 5%. No one aged 35 and over went to the cinema in this year. In 2000, there was an increase in the percentages of the 15-24 age group and those over 35, reaching peaks of nearly 60% and 17% respectively. The figure for the youngest age category peaked at nearly 38% in 1999, and then became equal to that of the 25-35 age group in 2000, at just over 30%.
The graph illustrates the proportions of four
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brackets visiting the
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once each month in Great Britain
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a period of 16 years from 1986 to 2000.

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that the UK experienced an
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cinema
attendance. Young adults
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aged
15 and 24 occupied the largest share during the period
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, whereas the percentage of the oldest group was
consistently
lowest.

In 1984, 18% of
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people
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15 and 24 visited the
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once a month, which
nearly
doubled that of children between 7 and 14/
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people
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7 and 14, at 10%. The figure for adults
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25 and 35 was much lower, at about 5%. No one
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35 and
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went to the
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cinema
in this year.

In 2000, there was an increase in the percentages of the 15-24
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age
group and those
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35, reaching peaks of
nearly
60% and 17%
respectively
. The figure for the youngest
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category peaked at
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38% in 1999, and then became equal to that of the 25-35
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group in 2000, at
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