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The graph shows the changes in proportion of music selling by different methods between 2011 and 2018.

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The graph shows the changes in proportion of music selling by different methods between 2011 and 2018. Overall, the graph shows me three main ways to sell musical products over the period: streams, downloads or CDs purchased. Each way had another trend of the alteration. In general, selling by CDs purchased reached a peak, with 58 percent of total music sales in 2011. However, it plummeted rapidly until it changed tendency which almost remained stable in 2018.
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methods between 2011 and 2018.

Overall
, the graph
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shows
me three main ways to sell musical products over the period: streams, downloads or CDs
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purchased
. Each way had another trend of the alteration.

In general
, selling by CDs
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purchased
reached a peak, with 58 percent of total music sales in 2011.
However
, it plummeted
rapidly
until it
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changed
tendency which almost remained stable in 2018.
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IELTS academic The graph shows the changes in proportion of music selling by different methods between 2011 and 2018.

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