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The graph shows information on the number of residents in a typical British household based on ethnicity.

The graph shows information on the number of residents in a typical British household based on ethnicity. MmK29
The bar graph illustrates the total of residents in a typical British households Asians have largest households. Overall, what stands out from graph is that, Asians have largest households in the country named uk it leads from Bangladeshi and closely followed by Pakistan. India has third largest household. Although there are followed two others. Looking at the British household based ethic, the percentage of people per household in Bangladeshi around 4: 2. Whereas, indian and Pakistani have sightly different approximately 4: 1 and 3: 3 respectively. After that, other asian the average of people per household almost 3: 2. With regards, other ethic groups Chinese and black African people per household are similar. However, white British and white Irish percentage approximately 2: 2. Others white and mixed so on, they are living under 25 residents in the uk.
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