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The graph shows cinema attendance by age

The graph shows cinema attendance by age G9O7B

the graph illustrates attendance to cinema based on variety age in Great Britian. Generally cinema attendance increased during period 1984 to 2000. Teenagers were the most enthius with 50% attendance in 1994 compared to other ages throughout the whole period meanwhile the range of 35 and over were the least interested in cinema with approximately 2% attendance in 1984. Tennagers attendace rose steadily from 1984 to 1990 and it had two significant improve in 1992 and also in 1994. 35 and over attendance rose slightly between 1984 and 2000. Both kids and adults experienced a period of volatility. kids attendance reach the peak of almost 40% in 1997 however it started to decrease since then. Adults interest in cinema was sharply increased in roughly a year or two and also it had significant fall in the end of the century. It is concluded that adults had the most rise and fall while range of 35 and over were the most steady ones

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