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The graph show about number of books borrowed from four village libraries

The graph show about number of books borrowed from four village libraries dknVP
The line graph illustrates books which is borrowed from 4 different villageʼs libraries( West Eaton, Ryeslip, Sutton Wood, Church Mount) between June to September. Units are measured in numberʼs of books Overall, it was upward trend in Church Mount and West Eaton villages. However, during that time, in Sutton Wood it was fluctuation. To begin with Weston Eaton which was increased slightly to 130 in July. Next months, number of books were stead rose with 150. However, Sutton Wood village was a fluctuate from June to September. In September it reached a peak at 300 books There was a downward trend in Ryeslip village which decreased sharply. 300 books borrowed from this village in June. In September it showed that 170 books. It changed respectively from June to SeptemberBetween June and September there was a gradual increase in Church Mount. There was stead rose to 150 in August
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villageʼs
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West Eaton,
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Ryeslip
, Sutton Wood, Church Mount) between June to September. Units
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numberʼs
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Overall
, it was upward trend in Church Mount and West Eaton
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villages
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However
, during that time, in Sutton Wood it was fluctuation. To
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begin
with Weston Eaton which
was increased
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to 130 in July.
Next
months, number of
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books
were stead rose with 150.
However
, Sutton Wood
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from June to September. In
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reached a peak at 300
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There was a downward trend in
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Ryeslip
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village
which decreased
sharply
. 300
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books
borrowed from this
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in June. In
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August

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