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The given bar charts illustrate the amount of time on which industrial employees worked weekly in four distinct European nations namely France, Denmark, Sweden and The UK by the year 2002.

The given bar charts illustrate the amount of time on which industrial employees worked weekly in four distinct European nations namely France, Denmark, Sweden and The UK by the year 2002. 0pmMq
The given bar charts illustrate the amount of time on which industrial employees worked weekly in four distinct European nations namely France, Denmark, Sweden and The UK by the year 2002. Overall, it is conspicuous that the percentages of Danish and Sweedish workers being on duty held the lion share compared to that of its counterparts. Meanwhile, except for working laborers in France, the proportion of staff in the remaining regions had a preference to work from 36 to 40 hours per week over the year surveyed. As can be seen in the charts, it is manifest that the manufacturing workers in France achieved precisely 50% of total spending 31-35 hours per week and this statistic was twice as much as that figure in Denmark. Besides, it was reported that the ratio of Sweedish and Britain workforce comprised around 39% and 10% respectively. Another particular note is that the amount of industrial employees in Sweden, Denmark and The UK allocating 36-40 hours weekly gained 80%, 70% and 50% by the given order, except for job-holders in France accounted for a negligible amount, nearly 35%. Turning to remaining figures, it is obvious that from 1 to 35 hours weekly duty, the fraction of laborers in 4 different European zones made up no more than 20%. Whilst, it was recorded that working from 41 to 50 plus hours weekly, varied from less than 10% and 20% workers of all regions.
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in four distinct European nations
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France, Denmark, Sweden and The UK by the year 2002.

Overall
, it is conspicuous that the percentages of Danish and
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Sweedish
workers being on duty held the lion share compared to that of its counterparts. Meanwhile,
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except for
working laborers in France, the proportion of staff in the remaining regions had a preference to work from 36 to 40
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hours
per week over the year surveyed.

As can be
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in the charts, it is manifest that the manufacturing workers in France achieved
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50% of total spending 31-35
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per week and this statistic was twice as much as that figure in Denmark.
Besides
, it
was reported
that the ratio of
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Sweedish
and Britain workforce comprised around 39% and 10%
respectively
. Another particular note is that the amount of industrial employees in Sweden, Denmark and The UK allocating 36-40
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hours
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weekly
gained 80%, 70% and 50% by the
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given
order,
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job-holders in France accounted for a negligible amount,
nearly
35%.

Turning to remaining figures, it is obvious that from 1 to 35
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hours
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weekly
duty, the fraction of laborers in 4
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different
European zones made up no more than 20%. Whilst, it
was recorded
that working from 41 to 50 plus
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hours
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, varied from less than 10% and 20% workers of all regions.
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IELTS academic The given bar charts illustrate the amount of time on which industrial employees worked weekly in four distinct European nations namely France, Denmark, Sweden and The UK by the year 2002.

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