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The graph illustrates the changes in domestic access to modern technology in the UK from 1996 and 7 years later.

The graph illustrates the changes in domestic access to modern technology in the UK from 1996 and 7 years later. eR7pA
The given line graph indicates changes in British's domestic usage for modern technology over 7 years, from 1996 to 2003. Overall, accessibility to all types of technology gradually increased over the studied period. Noticeably, the figure for CD players accounted for the largest share while that of internet access was the least. From 1996 to 1999, there were only three prevalent types of the latest technology in the UK namely CD player, home computer and mobile phone. Among those, CD player was used the most with its figure accounting for approximately three-fifths in 1996 then rose substantially to nearly 70% in 1999. A far less popular type of technology in the chart was home computers with just over 20%-30% British accessing them in 1996 and 1999 respectively. In the same period, the domestic use of mobile phones witnessed a moderate increase of around 5%, specifically from 18% to 23%. By the end of 2003, CD player was still the most-used modern technology among British, accounting for 80% of all domestic access. Meanwhile, the figure for mobile phone wildly fluctuated with an upward trend before ending the period with 70%, thus becoming the second most common type of technology used in the UK’s households in 2003. Although the percentage of computers used in British households doubled to reach 55% in 2003, it lost the second place to mobile phones. It was not until 1999 that the line representing Internet access appeared on the graph. At this point, only 10% people in the UK used it in their homes, however, the figure then increased dramatically to over two-fifths in 2003, yet it was still the lowest one.
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line graph indicates
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in British's domestic usage for modern
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technology
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7 years, from 1996 to 2003.

Overall
, accessibility to all
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types
of
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technology
gradually
increased
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over
the studied period.
Noticeably
, the
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figure
for CD
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players
accounted for the largest share while that of internet access was the least.

From 1996 to 1999, there were
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three prevalent
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types
of the latest
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technology
in the UK
namely
CD
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player
, home computer and mobile
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phone
. Among those, CD
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player
was
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used
the most with its
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accounting for approximately three-fifths in 1996 then rose
substantially
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70% in 1999. A far less popular
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type
of
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technology
in the chart was home computers with
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over
20%-30% British accessing them in 1996 and 1999
respectively
. In the same period, the domestic
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phones
witnessed a moderate increase of around 5%,
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from 18% to 23%.

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of 2003, CD
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was
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modern
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technology
among British, accounting for 80% of all domestic access. Meanwhile, the
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for mobile
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wildly
fluctuated with an upward trend
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ending the period with 70%,
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becoming the second most common
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technology
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used
in the UK’s households in 2003. Although the percentage of computers
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used
in British households doubled to reach 55% in 2003, it lost the second place to mobile
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phones
. It was not until 1999 that the line representing Internet access appeared on the graph. At this point,
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only
10%
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in the UK
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used
it in their homes,
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then increased
dramatically
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two-fifths in 2003,
yet
it was
still
the lowest one.
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IELTS academic The graph illustrates the changes in domestic access to modern technology in the UK from 1996 and 7 years later.

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