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The graph illustrates information about the sales of the most popular purchased items in a particular bakery in 2014.

The graph illustrates information about the sales of the most popular purchased items in a particular bakery in 2014. QVg3w

The graph illustrates information about the sales of the most popular purchased items in a particular bakery in 2014. During the next 4 months the sales of buns were enormously increasing until August, then it started to decrease. Pies line was stable enough; it was rising until the end of the year. The situation with the bread was the next: it has significantly diminished by March, then raised in April; the same combination of trends was repeating except September, when it started to increase. By January sales of buns were $40000, since that it was raising and reached $70000 in August. Sales of pies in the first month of the year were $10000. During the whole year it reached its maximum and was $40000. In January bread was tremendously popular and its line was on $80000. After that period, it has extremely decreased and contained about $45000 in March. The next month it was $60000. After April one can see a huge nadir in sales. By June it was more than $64000. In July it was $41000. Then it started to increase until the end of the year. Thus, it was $80000 in December.

The graph illustrates information about the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpurchasetransactiondealbusinessauctionmarketing
sales
 of the most popular This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquired
purchased
 items in a particular bakery in 2014.

During the next
 4 months the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpurchasetransactiondealbusinessauctionmarketing
sales
 of buns were enormously
 increasing until August, then it This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiated
started
 to decrease. Pies line was stable This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:abundance
enough
; it was rising until the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :expiration
end
 of the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withperiodbreadthtermmileagespandiameter
year
. The situation with the bread was the next
: it has significantly
 diminished by March, then raised in April; the same combination of trends was repeating except September, when it This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiated
started
 to increase.

By January You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpurchasetransactiondealbusinessauctionmarketing
sales
 of buns were $40000, since that it was raising and reached $70000 in August. You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpurchasetransactiondealbusinessauctionmarketing
Sales
 of pies in the first
 month of the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withperiodbreadthtermmileagespandiameter
year
 were $10000. During the whole You use this word too often, consider replacing it withperiodbreadthtermmileagespandiameter
year
 it reached its maximum and was $40000. In January bread was tremendously
 popular and its line was on $80000. After that period, it has extremely
 decreased and contained about $45000 in March. The next
 month it was $60000. “After” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
After
 April one can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witness
see
 a huge nadir in You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpurchasetransactiondealbusinessauctionmarketing
sales
. By The comma is probably missing here: "June, it".June, it
June it
 was more than $64000. In The comma is probably missing here: "July, it".July, it
July it
 was $41000. Then it This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiated
started
 to increase until the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :expiration
end
 of the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withperiodbreadthtermmileagespandiameter
year
. Thus
, it was $80000 in December. 