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The graph highlight data about the reasons why people relocated to a country's capital city from 2000 to 2015.

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The graph highlights data about the reasons why people relocated to a country's capital city from 2000 to 2015. Overall, the data of this chart showed remarkable upward trends in the people who chose employment and study as their reasons, while the number of people with the other reasons increased slowly in this period. In 2000, most people moved to the capital city with the aim of finding work and studying. The rate of these reaches the highest point in the next 10 years, which increased from sixty thousand to over ninety thousand people who are employed and from 25000 to over 50000 people who study in a big city. From 2010 to 2015, the people with job needs decreased slightly while the people with learning needs went up sharply with about 40000 people over the period of time. In sharp contrast to this, the other data changes gradually in this period. From 2000 to 2010, the … people moving in the big city with family or friends rise slightly from 10000 to over 20000 people and remain … in the next 5 years. Besides, the rate of people come to the capital to adventure changes slowly during from 2000 to 2015.
The graph highlights data about the reasons why
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people
relocated to a country's capital city from 2000 to 2015.

Overall
, the data of this chart
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showed
remarkable upward trends in the
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people
who chose employment and study as their reasons, while the number of
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people
with the other reasons increased
slowly
in this period.

In 2000, most
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people
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moved
to the capital city with the aim of finding work and studying. The rate of these reaches the highest point in the
next
10 years, which increased from sixty thousand to
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over
ninety thousand
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people
who
are employed
and from 25000 to
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over
50000
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people
who study in a
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big
city. From 2010 to 2015, the
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people
with job needs decreased
slightly
while the
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people
with learning needs went up
sharply
with about 40000
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people
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over
the period of time.

In sharp contrast to this, the other data
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changes
gradually
in this period. From 2000 to 2010, the …
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people
moving in the
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big
city with family or friends rise
slightly
from 10000 to
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over
20000
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people
and remain … in the
next
5 years.
Besides
, the rate of
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people
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come
to the capital to adventure
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changes
slowly
during from 2000 to 2015.

IELTS academic The graph highlight data about the reasons why people relocated to a country's capital city from 2000 to 2015.

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