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The graph displays the number of visitors four international museums from 1980 to 2015.

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The graph displays the number of visitors four international museums from 1980 to 2015. Four international museums include in Hermitage, Egyptian Museum, Tokyo National Museum and National Museum of Anthropology. The graph show that Tokyo National Museum increase between 1980 and 2015. Specially, visitors to Tokyo National Museum the most approximately go up in 2015. The graph represent that from 1980 to 2015 visitors at National Museum of Anthropology significantly decrease as twice as from 4000 to 2000. Hermitage Museum slowly go up and it has balance from 1980 to 2015. As you can clearly see Tokyo National Museum opposite with National Museum of Anthropology and the number of visitors 4 international museum develop not the same. Overall, you can see it from the graph, Hermitage Museum and Tokyo National approximately increase from 4000 to 8000. Hermitage and National Museum of Anthropology visitors decline.
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four international
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from 1980 to 2015. Four international
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include in Hermitage, Egyptian
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, Tokyo
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National
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and
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of Anthropology.

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that Tokyo
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increase between 1980 and 2015.
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visitors
to Tokyo
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National
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the most approximately go up in 2015.

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that from 1980 to 2015
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at
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National
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Museum
of Anthropology
significantly
decrease as twice as from 4000 to 2000. Hermitage
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slowly
go up and it has balance from 1980 to 2015. As you can
clearly
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Tokyo
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opposite with
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of Anthropology and the number of
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visitors
4 international
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develop not the same.

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, you can
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it from the
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, Hermitage
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and Tokyo
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approximately increase from 4000 to 8000. Hermitage and
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of Anthropology
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decline.

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