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The graph compares employment rates in three sectors of the economy, in the UK, 2000-2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram illustrates information about the number of people who are employed in the UK economy by three sectors, over the ten-year period between 2000 and 2010. Overall, it can be seen that there were gradual upward trends in the employment rate of both public and self-employment sectors, while the private sector experienced a considerable fall during the period in question. Looking at details, with respect to the public sector, the percentage started at approximately 40% in 2000. Having remained stable in the first three years, it then rose significantly to merely under 50% in 2005. Following this, the figure decreased substantially to nearly 5%, the percentage recovered in the next year. Subsequently, it reached a peak of 51%in 2010. If we look at the self-employed sector, the figure began at roughly 18%, which was the lowest one. Having fluctuated around 20 percent in the half of the decade, it then increased sharply year-on-year. Finally, it kept leveling off 30 percent during the last two years of this period. By contrast, the percentage of employees in the private sector was slightly lower 50% in 2000, which was the highest percentage of the three sectors. After that, there was a considerable decline to around 40% in 2002. Despite standing steady the next year, it then fell constantly in the following years to hit through of 20% in 2010.
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are employed
in the UK economy by three
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, over the ten-year period between 2000 and 2010.

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, it can be
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seen
that there were gradual upward trends in the employment rate of both public and self-employment
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sectors
, while the private
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sector
experienced a considerable fall during the period in question.

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, with respect to the public
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sector
, the
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started
at approximately 40% in 2000. Having remained stable in the
first
three years, it then rose
significantly
to
merely
under 50% in 2005. Following this, the figure decreased
substantially
to
nearly
5%, the
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recovered in the
next
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.
Subsequently
, it reached a peak of 51%in 2010. If we look at the self-employed
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sector
, the figure began at roughly 18%, which was the lowest one. Having fluctuated around 20 percent in the half of the decade, it then increased
sharply
year-on-year.
Finally
, it
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kept
leveling off 30 percent during the last two years of this period.

By contrast, the
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percentage
of employees in the private
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sector
was
slightly
lower 50% in 2000, which was the highest
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percentage
of the three
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sectors
. After that, there was a considerable decline to around 40% in 2002. Despite standing steady the
next
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year
, it then fell
constantly
in the following years to hit through of 20% in 2010.
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IELTS academic The graph compares employment rates in three sectors of the economy, in the UK, 2000-2010.

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