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The graph below shows the rentals and sales (in various type) of one specifc store between 2002 and 2011

The graph below shows the rentals and sales (in various type) of one specifc store between 2002 and 2011 ljL5X

The bar chart clearly communicates the number of rentals and purchases of different film formats from a single store yearly from 2002 to 2011. In general, it is clear that while the sales of DVD and Blu-ray witnessed upward developments, rentals and VHS sales were negatively correlated with downward trends. What stands out from the chart is that DVD purchases had the highest number over most of the given period. In detail, rental sales stood at approximately 185, 000 sales in 2002, which was the highest figure among the four forms. This figure plummeted and reached a low of under 60, 000 sales in 2011. Besides that, the revenue of VHS went through a period of dramatic decrease from 80, 000 sales in 2002 to 10, 000 sales, which was the lowest number of sales in 2005. By contrast, the figure for DVD and Blu-ray experienced opposite movements. In 2002, the sale of DVDs was the lowest number with almost 50, 000 sales. This figure then experienced a dramatic increase and reached a peak of over 210, 000 sales in 2007, before hitting a slight fall to 180, 000 sales in 2011. Likewise, blu-ray saw a consistent climb from around 0 in 2007 to approximately 12, 000 sales in 2011

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