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The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the number of inquests the Tourist Information Office obtained in a certain city over an intervel of six months from January to June in 2011. Also, they are classified into 3 categories: in person, by letter / email or by telephone. Overall, in the first three months the office reached most of the questions by telphone. However, in the last months most people tend to inquire about tourism in person. In addition to that, it can be seen that both the line graph concerning in person and by telphone increased over the six months. But, the by letter / email category took a decreasing course of action. In January, the number of inquiries received by telephone and in person were respectively about 900 and just above 400. Both numbers climbed to reach exactly 1600 and around 1900 in the last month In terms of questions collected by letter / email, it was just under 800 in January before decreasing to reach under 400 in June.
The line graph illustrates the number of inquests the Tourist Information Office obtained in a certain city over an
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of six
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from January to June in 2011.
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, they
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person
, by letter / email or by telephone.

Overall
, in the
first
three
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months
the office reached most of the questions by
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telphone
.
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, in the last
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most
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people
tend to inquire about tourism in
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person
.
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to that, it can be
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seen
that both the line graph concerning in
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person
and by
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telphone
increased over the six
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months
.
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, the by letter / email category took a decreasing course of action.

In January, the number of inquiries received by telephone and in
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were
respectively
about 900 and
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above 400. Both numbers climbed to reach exactly 1600 and around 1900 in the last
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In terms of questions collected by letter / email, it was
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under 800 in January

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decreasing to reach under 400 in June.

IELTS academic The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

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