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The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. PQkB
The diagram displays the volume of information requests received by Toursist Information Office in a city within six-month period in a particular year. The in person enquiries are increased more than four times as it compared between Jan and Jun. But the requests using letter or by email reduced a lot within the six-month period. As this method contrasted with others, It is the least used method of requesting information in the recent time. The enquiries over telephone are become less popular in February. But in the month of March, The Tourist Information Office flowed with increased number of informational requests. In July, The most used form to request information is using in person as it releated to other forms of requests including telephone and by letter or email in the first six-month period of 2011. The least used method after the six month period is using telephone for requesting tourist information with less than 400 enquiries per month.
The diagram displays the volume of
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Office in a city within six-month
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in a particular year.

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using letter or by email
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a lot within the six-month
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. As this method contrasted with others, It is the least
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used
method of requesting
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in the recent time.

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over telephone
are become
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in the month of March, The Tourist
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Office flowed with increased number of informational
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requests
. In July, The most
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form to
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request
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is using in person as it
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releated
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including telephone and by letter or email in the
first
six-month
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of 2011. The least
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method after the
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six month
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is using telephone for requesting tourist
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with less than 400
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enquiries
per month.

IELTS academic The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

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