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The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The figure represents the seven steps that bees are required to producing honey. Overall, the folwers are the main source of honey since they provid bees by Nectra which converts finally to honey. Firstly, a group of bees leave their hive forword a flowers to collect the nectar and reback for thier countainer. Furthermore, the hive consists of many connected series cells so the bees insert their combined nectars in each cells. Secondly, After adding the sweet liquid into cells, the draying process is starting by a group of bees that using their wings for evaporating the waters in nectar. Finally, the honey is combined by cutting and presuring on a part of hive and fill it in cups.
The figure represents the seven steps that bees
are required
to producing honey.
Overall
, the
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folwers
are the main source of honey since they
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provid
bees by
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Nectra
which converts
finally
to honey.

Firstly
, a group of bees
Possible agreement error. Did you mean "leaves"? (Some collective nouns can be treated as both singular and plural, so 'leave' is not always incorrect.)
leave
their hive
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forword
Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean "a flower" or simply "flowers"?
a flowers
to collect the nectar and
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reback
for
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thier
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countainer
.
Furthermore
, the hive consists of
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many
connected series cells
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so
the bees insert their combined
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nectars
in each
The noun should be probably in the singular form: "cell"?
cells
.

Secondly
, After adding the sweet liquid into cells, the
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draying
process is starting by a group of bees that using their wings for evaporating the waters in nectar.
Finally
, the honey
is combined
by cutting and
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presuring
on a part of hive and fill it in cups.

IELTS academic The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
119 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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