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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. EyML
The line graph compares and contrasts the data about the amount of fish and three kinds of meat, namely, lamb, beef and chicken consumed by European country measured by grams per person per week over 25 years period from 1979 to 2004. According to the graph, fish had always been less than other kind of meet. The beef consumption had gradual decline, while chicken consumption had rose significantly in the same time period. The lamb was consumed with fluctuated wane as beef consumption. At the start of the period the amount of beef consumption had been over 200 gram per week, but the amount rapidly dropped to nearly 150 gram in 1889. Similarly, lamb consumption was nearly 150 gram per week in 1979, then data gradually fell and reached only over 50 gram in the 2004. The amount of fish, which was eaten dropped moderately in 1984 and has remained at about 50 grams from 1984 to 2004. In contrast, chicken consumption had grown up gradually for about 100 reaching the peak on 250 grams in 2004.
The line graph compares and contrasts the data about the
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of fish and three kinds of meat,
namely
, lamb,
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beef
and chicken consumed by European country measured by
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grams
per person per week over 25 years period from 1979 to 2004.

According to the graph, fish had always been less than other kind of
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meet
. The
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beef
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consumption
had gradual decline, while chicken
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consumption
had
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rose
significantly
in the same time period. The lamb
was consumed
with fluctuated wane as
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beef
consumption.

At the
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start
of the period the
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amount
of
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beef
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consumption
had been over 200
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gram
per week,
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but
the
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amount
rapidly
dropped to
nearly
150
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gram
in 1889.
Similarly
, lamb
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consumption
was
nearly
150
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gram
per week in 1979, then data
gradually
fell and reached
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only
over 50
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gram
in the 2004. The
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amount
of fish, which
was eaten
dropped
moderately
in 1984 and has remained at about 50
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grams
from 1984 to 2004.
In contrast
, chicken
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consumption
had grown up
gradually
for about 100 reaching the peak on 250
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grams
in 2004.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

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