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The chart below shows information about the favourite subject of 60students from two schools.

The chart below shows information about the favourite subject of 60students from two schools. KA6L
The given bar graph illustrates the data about best-beloved subject of 60 students from two different schools, namely school A and school B. Overall, what stands out from the graph is that the highest number of students from school A like sport whereas lowest number of students like science from school B. As far as concerning for school A, the most liking subject is sport among all other subjects which constitutes 36 students, while the boring one is science for only minor fraction of students. The fraction for both craft and language subjects is merely around 4-5. Meanwhile, social science got 10 per cent of students. Moving to school B, it is clearly seen that it is opposing data from school A with only 5 students are interested in sport whereas drawing is becoming interesting for 25 students. However, social science and science are declared as favourite one from 10 and 9 students respectively. Finally, 18 students want to learn language subject.
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A like sport whereas lowest number of
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B. As far as concerning for
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A, the most liking
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is sport among all other
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which constitutes 36
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, while the boring one is
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. The fraction for both craft and language
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5
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in sport whereas drawing is becoming interesting for 25
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and
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are declared
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want to learn language
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IELTS academic The chart below shows information about the favourite subject of 60students from two schools.

Academic
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1 paragraphs
162 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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