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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and different kinds of meat

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The graph represents how many grams of fish, lamb, beef and chicken were consumed weekly in a particular European nation in the years 1979 to 2004 Overall, while there was a noticeable growth in the amount of chicken eaten and a lightly decrease the grams that fish was eaten, the consumption of the other two kinds of meat witnessed a significantly downward trend during 25-year period. Although the grams that chicken consumed hold the third position at approximately 150 grams per person per week in 1979, but after that consumption of chicken had been soaring high to about 230 grams in 1999 before reaching the maximum values at around 250 grams in 2004. In contrast, it was observed to show a little change in fish consumption, a light drop was seen from more than 50 grams in 1979 to less than 50 grams in 2004, which was the least quantity among kinds of meat. Between 1979 and 2004, based on each person weekly, lamp consumption experienced three-fold decrease from 150 grams in the first year of survey to nearly 50 grams in the final one. Besides that, the amount of beef dropped like a rock, from around 210 grams in 1979 to approximately 100 grams in 2004, which was about more than half in spite of the quantity of beef eaten in firstly five-year period, which was the same to the amount of chicken consumed in 1999.
The graph represents how
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of fish, lamb, beef and chicken
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of the other two kinds of meat witnessed a
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that chicken consumed hold the third position at approximately 150
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per person per week in 1979,
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after that
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of chicken had been soaring high to about 230
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in 1999
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in 2004.
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in fish
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from more than 50
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in 1979 to less than 50
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in 2004, which was the least quantity among kinds of meat.

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in the
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in 1979 to approximately 100
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in 2004, which was about more than half
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five-year period, which was the same to the amount of chicken consumed in 1999.
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