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The graph below shows the average monthly temperature in three well known cities. Athense Barcelona and Sydney

The graph below shows the average monthly temperature in three well known cities. Athense Barcelona and Sydney Q2j7y
The given line graph manifests the approximate temperature ratio in three urban areas between January and December. Overall, the highest temperature was noted in July at Athense whereas the least degree temperature was accounted to Barcelona in January in December. To embark with, the majority of temperature noted at Sydney in January which was accounted to about 27 degree Celsius, but it was drastically e fall down to under minority in July which was approximately 14 degree Celsius. However it shoot up significantly to nearly 27 degree celsius in zeninth point in December. Moving further, Athens and Barcelona showed a similar pattern. In January a minority of temperature in both cities but it swelled to nearly 30 degree Celsius in Athens and about 29 degree celsius in Barcelona respectively. Whereas a steep reduction to about 7 degree Celsius occurred in December in both cities. A mammoth difference noted in Sydney.
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ratio in three urban areas between January and December.
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, the highest
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temperature
was noted
in July at
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Athense
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was accounted
to Barcelona in January in December. To embark with, the majority of
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noted at Sydney in January which
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Celsius,
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Celsius.
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celsius
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point in December. Moving
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, Athens and Barcelona
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showed
a similar pattern. In January a minority of
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in both cities
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Celsius in Athens and about 29
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in Barcelona
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Celsius occurred in December in both cities. A mammoth difference noted in Sydney.

IELTS academic The graph below shows the average monthly temperature in three well known cities. Athense Barcelona and Sydney

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