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The graph below shows the age at which women in Australia first got married. Data is provided for the year 1970 and now.

The graph below shows the age at which women in Australia first got married. Data is provided for the year 1970 and now. joEr8

The Graph illustrates the percentage of Australian Woman first got married ages by different age groups from 1970 to present day. Overall, In the Graph the most popular time frame to get married was between the ages of 20 and 29 in Australia. After on these ages there is a descreasment stands out until 50 and plus ages. By looking at the 1970’s ratios it can be said that the under 19 age range had nearly 10% of marrying. For the age group 20-24 has made a peak with marrying percentages with 40% but after on that the rate decrased to a little bit more than 25% for 25-29 ages. Later the value found itself between 15 and 20 percentages in the third group (30-34). Finally, the ratio never became more than 10 percentages and for the final age group (50 and more) the ratio stopped at almost 0% Apart from that, Nowadays people who is under 19 arent marrying as much as what it was in 1970 before. The ratio is less than 5 percent. However the rate started going up and stayed at a little more than 15 percent at age group 20 to 24. Moreover it saw the highest rate at the third age group (25-29) with half of 30 and 35 percents. Later on that the ratio started falling down and at age group 30-34 the ratio stayed at 25%. Finally the decreasment continued to last age group and the rate stayed at more than 0%.

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