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The graph below show the Gross Value Added of Taiwan in two different industries from the year 2005 to 2009 in percentage.

The graph illustrates the Gross Value Added of Taiwan in two different sectors between the year 2005 and 2019 in proportion. Overall, both sectors increased tremendous but the Manufacturing sector raised comparatively more than service sector. In 2005, the Gross Value Added of Service sector was at 4 per cent which had experienced slight raise in the next year. Moreover, from 2006 to 2009 a noticeable increment in the Gross Value Added had been observed. On the other hand, the Gross Value Added of the Manufacturing sector was just over 6 per cent in 2005 and in the next year a slight raise about 2 per cent had been seen. In addition to this, the GVA of Manufacturing sector had remarkable increased nearly 16 per cent between the year 2007 and 2009.
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2005 and 2019 in proportion.
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IELTS academic The graph below show the Gross Value Added of Taiwan in two different industries from the year 2005 to 2009 in percentage.

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