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The bar graph below shows the number of Olympic medals won by China, USA and Russia from 2004 to 2016.

The bar graph illustrates the number of Olympic medals won by 3 nations like China, USA and Russia between 2004 and 2016. Overall, USA has won the highest number of medals throughout the period of 12 years whereas Russia had the lowest numbers except in 2004. In 2004, China had won just over 60 medals and a sharp increase was observed in the next 4 years. Moreover, continuous reduction was observed in the number of medals from 2008 to 2016. However, US had won slightly more than 100 medals and Russia had given tough competition by obtaining about 90 medals in 2004. In the next game, US had won 10 more medals whereas reduction in the number of medal of Russia had been observed. In 2016, US had achieved the highest number of medals in the Olympic while Russia had received least medals.
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won by 3 nations like China, USA and Russia between 2004 and 2016.
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throughout the period of 12 years whereas Russia had the lowest
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except in 2004. In 2004, China had won
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from 2008 to 2016.
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and Russia had
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in 2004. In the
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whereas reduction in the
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of Russia had
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IELTS academic The bar graph below shows the number of Olympic medals won by China, USA and Russia from 2004 to 2016.

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