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The graph below gives information about the preferred leisure activities of Australian children. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.

Some interesting data concerning the preference, about a selection of leisure activities, of two groups of Australian children, are revealed in the graph. The children are grouped for sex and the age band analysed is 5-14. The most significant fact is that, with the only exeptin of watching tv or videos, that was the activity with the highest appreciation(100%) and it stood at the same level both for male and females, all the other hobbies shows a different rate of partecipation amongst the groups. Moving to a more detailed analysis, three activities engaged more boys than girls, that are, in descending order, electronic or computer games (80%), bike riding ( little above 70%) and skateboarding or rollerblading (approximately 40%). As regard for girls' percentages, these same three activities rank the same with a 60%, a bit under the 60%, and almost a 30% respectively. Lastly art and crafts is the only hobby that witnesses a greater participation of females at an approximately 60% as opposite to the male one at a 30%.
Some
interesting data concerning the preference, about a selection of leisure
activities
, of two groups of Australian children,
are revealed
in the graph. The children
are grouped
for sex and the age band
analysed
is 5-14. The most significant fact is that, with the
only
exeptin
of watching
tv
or videos, that was the
activity
with the highest appreciation(100%) and it stood at the same level both for male and females, all the other hobbies
shows
a
different
rate of
partecipation
amongst the groups.

Moving to a more detailed analysis, three
activities
engaged more boys than girls, that are, in descending order, electronic or computer games (80%), bike riding
(
little
above 70%) and skateboarding or rollerblading (approximately 40%). As regard for girls' percentages, these same three
activities
rank the same with a 60%, a bit under the 60%, and almost a 30%
respectively
.

Lastly
art and crafts is the
only
hobby that witnesses a greater participation of females at an approximately 60% as opposite to the male one at a 30%.
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IELTS academic The graph below gives information about the preferred leisure activities of Australian children. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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