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The graph below gives information about the preferred leisure activities of Australian children. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.

The graph shows the preferred leisure activities of Australian children aged 5-14. As might be expected, it is clear from the data that sedentary pursuits are far more popular nowadays than active ones. Of the 10, 000 children that were interviewed, all the boys and girls stated that they enjoyed watching TV or videos in their spare time. In addition, the second most popular activity, attracting 80% of boys and 60% of girls, was playing electronic or computer games. While just under 60% of girls rated activities such as art and craft as their favorite activity in their spare time, only 35% of boys opted for creative pastimes. Bike riding, on the other hand, was almost as popular as electronic games amongst boys and, perhaps surprisingly, almost 60% of girls said that they enjoyed this too. Skateboarding was relatively less popular amongst both boys and girls, although it still attracted 35% of boys and 25% of girls.
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of Australian children aged 5-14. As might be
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, it is
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from the data that sedentary pursuits are far more
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nowadays than active ones.

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stated that they enjoyed watching TV or videos in their spare time.
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, the second most
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, attracting 80% of
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and 60% of
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, was playing electronic or computer games. While
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rated
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in their spare time,
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35% of
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opted for creative pastimes. Bike riding,
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as electronic games amongst
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and, perhaps
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, almost 60% of
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girls
said that they enjoyed this too. Skateboarding was
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IELTS academic The graph below gives information about the preferred leisure activities of Australian children. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.

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