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The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. dAE7
The given line graph depicts how the birth and death rates changed in New Zealand, in the interval year of 1901 to 2101. Overall, death rates shows a steady increase while birth rates had a fluctuated trend over the periods. In the beginning of the period, the number of death rates was approximately 10, 000. It then constantly showed a steady grow until 2001, reaching approximately 30, 000. Afterwards, the trend is projected to climb significantly to 60, 000 in 2061. Following that, we expect the level to be constant until 2101. As f0r the birth, in 2101 the rate's trend was started in marginally above 20, 000, in which it then showed a fluctuated increase until 1941. The trend suddenly showed a significant climb to about 60, 000 in 1961. Another dip was taken place in 1981 in which the number showed 50, 000 birth. In 2001 there was a slight rise to more or less 55, 000. The trend is estimated to make a gradual drop to slightly over 40, 000 during the remaining years.
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line graph depicts how the
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birth
and death
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rates
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changed
in New Zealand, in the interval year of 1901 to 2101.

Overall
, death
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rates
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shows
a steady increase while
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birth
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rates
had a fluctuated
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trend
over the periods.

In the beginning of the period, the number of death
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rates
was approximately 10, 000. It then
constantly
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showed
a steady grow until 2001, reaching approximately 30, 000. Afterwards, the
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trend
is projected
to climb
significantly
to 60, 000 in 2061. Following that, we
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expect
the level to be constant until 2101.

As f0r the
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birth
, in 2101 the rate's
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trend
was
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started
in
marginally
above 20, 000, in which it then
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showed
a fluctuated increase until 1941. The
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trend
suddenly
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showed
a significant climb to about 60, 000 in 1961. Another dip
was taken
place in 1981 in which the number
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showed
50, 000
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birth
. In 2001 there was a slight rise to more or less 55, 000. The
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trend
is estimated
to
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make
a gradual drop to
slightly
over 40, 000 during the remaining years.
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IELTS academic The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101.

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