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The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. AYg1
The renderd graph visualizes the detail about chnges in birth and death rates of masses in New Zealand in the time period of 1901 toh 2101 In 1901, Number of births was noticed near about 20, 000 pr month. where as, death rate was nearly half of it by 8000. Moreover, it had followed upward trend uptill 1961 it was noticed at its peak point with the figure of 67, 000 but looking at death rates it was noticed that 20, 000 people were dead in same year. Nevertheless, the sharp dive can be noticed in rate of births with the figure of 50, 000 in 1981. Death rate was still following upward trend. Afterthis, It is estimated that number of death rates will be more than birth rates in 2101 with the figure of 60, 000 and 45, 000 respectively. To conclude, according to graph in New Zealand number of death will rise more than birth rate in upcoming years.
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of masses in New Zealand in the time period of 1901
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at its peak point with the figure of 67, 000
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looking at death
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were dead in same year.

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with the figure of 50, 000 in 1981. Death
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in 2101 with the figure of 60, 000 and 45, 000
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, according to graph in New Zealand number of death will rise more than
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IELTS academic The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101.

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