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The given pie charts illustrate the proportion of the change of touristy in two countries from 1960 to 2010.

The given pie charts illustrate the proportion of the change of touristy in two countries from 1960 to 2010. 3LOJJ

The given pie charts illustrate the proportion of the change of touristy in two countries from 1960 to 2010. The The general overview here is that the majority of travel in Australia came from The Europe in 1960, While after 50-year later most of travel came from the Asia on the contrary in the Germany the highest amount of touristy came from the Europe throughout the period. As it can be seen that from the charts, The European people was the most figure of travel in Australia and Germany in 1960, accounting for 53% and 45% respectively. There were a significant movement after passing 50 years, the number of Europe touristy in Australia declined dramatically by 43% to 10% in 2010, while there was a slightly drop in Germany to 40% in a total percentage. Similarly, the Britain tourism indicated the figure of one in four in 1960 in both countries, in Australia the number decreased minimally by 5% to 20% even so, the figure of Germany experienced a steady fall of 16% to 6% throughout the period. In contrast, in 1960 the Asia touristy represented the same amount of 10%, after five decades there was a remarkable increase by 53% to 63% in Australia in 2010, whereas the Asia touristy amount of Germany rose moderately to 25%. Along with the amount of the USA tourism in Germany grew a mere 4% in 2010 compare with the number in 1960. However, in Australia the figure of the USA slightly reduce of 5% to 7% over the period observed.

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