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The given pie charts depict the percentage of British pupils at one university who apart from English dominated to speak other languages in 2000 and 2010.

The given pie charts depict the percentage of British pupils at one university who apart from English dominated to speak other languages in 2000 and 2010. yLXWM
Given are two bar charts setting of the percentage of students in one of the Britain university who knew a sideline language besides English in two different times, 2000 and 2007. Overall, the number of those who could speak just English was half in 2010 compared to 2000, and the most popular foreign was Spanish in both mentioned years. Turning to the details, the students speaking Spanish and English accounted for 30 percent in 2000, which experienced a slight increase ten years later (35%). Moreover, Germany as a second language constituted one-tenth of the studied group not only in 2000 but also in 2010. However, the students who knew only French besides English in 2010 were two-thirds of those in 2000. Also, the number of students at British university and familiar with other languages, not the ones mentioned, was 15% in the former year and 20% in the latter one. In addition, the proportion of those who learned two lingoes with English rose by 5 percent over a ten-year period.
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times, 2000 and 2007.

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English was half in 2010 compared to 2000, and the most popular foreign was Spanish in both mentioned years.

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, the
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speaking Spanish and English accounted for 30 percent in 2000, which experienced a slight increase ten years later (35%).
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knew
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French
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English in 2010 were two-thirds of those in 2000.
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, the number of
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at British university and familiar with other languages, not the ones mentioned, was 15% in the former year and 20% in the latter one.
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, the proportion of those
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learned two lingoes with English rose by 5 percent over a ten-year period.
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IELTS academic The given pie charts depict the percentage of British pupils at one university who apart from English dominated to speak other languages in 2000 and 2010.

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