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The given pie chart represents the online trade for retail sectors for various items such as travel, film/music, books and clothes in between year 2003 t0 2013.

The given pie chart represents the online trade for retail sectors for various items such as travel, film/music, books and clothes in between year 2003 t0 2013. yDX0l
The given pie chart represents the online trade for retail sectors for various items such as travel, film/music, books and clothes in between year 2003 t0 2013. Overall, the highest proportion of share of the sales is occupied by travel and least of it is occupied by books in 2003. In comparison, at the end of the period, films/music became the largest sales segment and the lowest contribution was made by clothing. In 2003, the highest proportion of sales was travel with 36 percent of the total shares whereas the least contribution was made by book sales at 19 percent. The second common segment was clothing with 24 percent of the total shares and 21 percent of the contribution was made by film/music which was slightly higher than clothing segment. In contrast, at the end of the year 2013, the highest percentage of sales was accounted by film and music which was not so common in beginning of the period. The lowest sales was for clothing with the increase of 8 percent. An insignificant amount of decrement by 3 percent in book sales was observed by the end of the period.
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and clothes in between year 2003 t0 2013.

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is occupied
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in 2003.
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end
of the period, films/music became the largest
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segment and the lowest contribution
was made
by clothing.

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sales
was travel with 36
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of the total shares whereas the least contribution
was made
by
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book
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at 19
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. The second common segment was clothing with 24
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of the total shares and 21
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of the contribution
was made
by film/music which was
slightly
higher than clothing segment.

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, at the
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end
of the year 2013, the highest percentage of
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sales
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by film and music which was not
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common in beginning of the period. The lowest
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sales
was for clothing with the increase of 8
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. An insignificant amount of decrement by 3
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in
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book
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sales
was observed
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IELTS academic The given pie chart represents the online trade for retail sectors for various items such as travel, film/music, books and clothes in between year 2003 t0 2013.

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