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The given pie chart provides information about the proportion of UAE government spendings for the year 2000.

The given pie chart provides information about the proportion of UAE government spendings for the year 2000. R0rkV
The given pie chart provides information about the proportion of UAE government spendings for the year 2000. From the figures it can be concluded that, the UAE government tended to spend a lion part of its savings on social needs. In terms of most significant segment that money was spent on was social security, which accounted for AED 100 billion. Though, the proportion of money went to improving health and personal social services was halved, yet it is a noticeable part the government spent money on. As well as AE 38 billion which were meant for Education fraction. When added together, these three categories made up about three quarters of the total UAE government spendings in 2000. In stark contrast, there were seven more categories that were granted with observably less amount of allowance. Transport, for example was a field with the lowest percentage of money expend on, accounting for a minute 9 billon. Slightly more was spent on such categories as Industry-Agriculture, environment, and low and order on which 45 billions were spent, collectively. On particular note is that approximately equal amount of money was expand on dept interest and defence, representing 23 and 22 billion, respectively.
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pie chart provides information about the proportion of UAE
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spendings
for the year 2000.

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be concluded
that, the UAE
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tended to spend a lion part of its savings on social needs.

In terms of most significant segment that
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was
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spent
on was social security, which accounted for AED 100
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billion
. Though, the proportion of
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money
went to improving health and personal social services
was halved
,
yet
it is a noticeable part the
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government
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spent
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money
on.
As well
as AE 38
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billion
which
were meant
for Education fraction. When
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added
together, these three categories made up about three quarters of the total UAE
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spendings
in 2000.

In stark contrast, there were seven more categories that
were granted
with
observably
less amount of allowance.

Transport,
for example
was a field with the lowest percentage of
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expend on, accounting for a minute 9
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.
Slightly
more was
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spent
on such categories as Industry-Agriculture, environment, and low and order on which 45
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billions
were
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spent
,
collectively
. On particular note is that approximately equal amount of
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was
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expand
on dept interest and
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defence
, representing 23 and 22
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billion
,
respectively
.
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